Regular Writing的Summerize

[cp]周末得空，仔細看了下ET寫的這兩篇關于jellyfish小作文，做個分析吧，這頁worksheet的題意是要求根據(jù)這本《RAZ O Jellyfish》的書做一篇Summerize。You're a Jellyfish(RAZ O) 

一開始ET認為Who只能是人，把所有的noun都寫到了What里，并且寫了多個where和when，這其實都還只是不精準都沒大毛病，最要命的是在Summary的地方，他以第一人稱寫起了一篇故事，故事是這樣的：
I am a jellyfish（Well,not actually）.I have long tentacles steaming under me(of course not).I'm a kind of invertebrate, which means that I don't  have backbones(I have backbones alright).Some of us lives in lakes and ponds.Some lucky fellows have been around for 650 million years-long before the time of dinosaurs.
我承認這篇故事寫的挺有趣，尤其是括號里的well，not actually，I have backbones alright這兩句，有那么點小孩子的詼諧在里頭。只是可惜，Summary并不是要以first person的視角去寫這樣一個故事，雖然elements都是齊全的。

帶著他一起把Who、What、Where、When這些重新梳理了一下，把unimportant information去掉，最后寫出來這樣一篇看起來還不錯的小作文：
Jellyfish are invetebreates who are made of water,muscles,and nerves,so they can't leave water.Somy lucky survivors are 650 million years old.They move by taking in water and squeezing them out.The life cycle of jellyfish contains eggs,olanala,polyp,budding polyp,young,and adult mudusa.Some predators of jellyfish might be sea turtles,and some preys of jellyfish might be fish,shrimp,and other tiny marine animals.Scientist dicovered a large red jellyfish that had oral arms but no tentacles in 2003 which they named Big Red.

可能7歲這個年齡，要去分析文章，還要寫出來這種summary確實對他來說比較難

#原版英文學習#[/cp]